cedar_grove | Revelation Act 1

Title: Revelation
Rating: NC-17 (adult readers) due to S.L.V
WARNING: Act 1 contains non-con - may be triggering
Spoilers: Some spoilers for S1-4
Summary: On the brink of death, Todd risks an untested serum and is thrust into a spiral of madness and instinct. Meanwhile, Kenny must persuade the inhospitable Wraith Sentinels to transfer the Queen's young to the Nursery facility. On Atlantis, Haddad continues the desperate race to save Keller, that may lead her to follow Beckett into the deepest peril she has yet faced. (WARNING: Contains Non-con essential to the story.)
Disclaimer: MGM own Stargate: Atlantis. This story is for entertainment purposes only and no revenue is being made from copyright material. No infrigement intended.

Act 1 now available.

Author's Note: Look guys, the rating says it all, but I'll spell it out. This contains explicit scenes, and the non-con warning appears at the header of the Act's page above the image, and on the Atlantis home page. You HAVE been warned. Many thanks

gospikey for hard work in Beta.

Previous Episodes:
Harm's Way (1), Chain of Command (2), Enmity (3), Mantle (4), In Truth... Freedom (5), Letting Go (6), Beyond the Third (7), Deliverance (8), No Way Back, (9) Apostasy (10) and Crossing Lines (11) can be accessed here.

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Elder Wraith Hive:

You can call me completely stupid, but at the beginning of the Jethera/Ancients thing, I thought she actually was an Ancient herself (in present time). Perhaps a reincarnated one, or an original. Ascended? Who knows. Purpose, though?

But that’s probably totally wrong.

A rending, tearing fire that immolated every cell of her entire being, body, mind and spirit, and with a darkness gathering at the edges of her vision, helpless to do otherwise she felt herself flowing through the contact with this terrifying beast in front of her into the dark maelstrom that was the soul of the Queen.

Her failing heart pounded in her chest and—

Jethera wakes up.

She asks Malcolm why she would dream such a thing, and if not the *ahem* logical *ahem* conclusion I came to, why indeed would she?

Her mind does not conjure something like this up out of nowhere, I’d say, so either it’s implanted in her thoughts through one means, or she’s tapping into something/someone herself? Does that make sense?

No idea if I’m completely insane, though.

One question, if I may: one handmaiden, if I’m not mistaken, was described to be without a feeding mark on her unblemished chest. Was that Jethera? I take it she still looks young, because only a young one would be chosen as handmaiden? Would that imply she truly was never fed upon, or does she always get fully healed, feeding mark included, and others just don’t bother with that when they’re perhaps punishing worshippers? Or she never did anything wrong, and she’s just a curious young one. Hmm…

"Our Matron had seen a far greater danger than a simple revolution among our servants," he said, fixing her in place with his gaze as he reached for her mind…

{one that would threaten her very existence} {existence} {existence} {existence}

Is that the ‘failsafe’ that’s mentioned in the next part? The mother was supposed to die, but didn’t, or didn’t yet?

Hmm, must keep track of that thing as well.

Todd’s Hive/current situation:

Oi. It’s a good thing Kenny managed to nip the little rebellion in the bud. Todd might not have been a happy camper if he came back to see either his Second dead, or his Third. Definitely his Third.

Can’t believe he pulled that stunt with the nursing facility. No, wait, I can.

I’m happy he managed to heal Alicia. I hope to see him reunite with his Hive, soon. Oh, and will there be even more consequences for Todd regarding that shot he gave himself?

Elder Wraith Hive 2:

Is the new title correct? There’s a new Elder/Matron flying around? Is that the redhead of the meeting a while ago?

Looking forward to more.

Thanks as ever for writing.

Spikey

Hive/Wraith

Spikey, I would never call you stupid, let alone 'completely stupid' Jethera... has a function and a purpose. Who or what she is will be revealed in time... as well as just who she's hiding from... ooops, did I just give something away?

Her dreams are important... and I don't think you are 'completely' insane.

You know you can always ask questions - I might not answer, but you can always ask, so go ahead, shoot. :)

Yes, the handmaiden with the unblemished chest was indeed Jethera - she is indeed still young. And yes, the implication is that she has never been fed upon... the implication may or may not be correct.

And again, yes, the 'greater danger' was indeed the 'failsafe' - but Michael has a word or two to say on 'failsafe' mechanisms in the next act. :)

Todd

Yeah, Kenny is nothing if not efficient that way. Watch for Kenny to... become a little more his own Wraith in coming episodes.

Why can't you believe he pulled that stunt with the nursing facility? And which he? Todd or Kenny? And then, wait, yes you can? Writer is confused :D

He and Alicia will indeed soon reunite with the Hive, and the consequences for Todd re the anti hoff shot... will be addressed. Yes.

Elder Hive No. 2

The new title is correct. There is a new (well old actually, but let's not split hairs over this), Elder Wraith Queen flying around. No, it's not the redhead of the meeting from a while ago, but she is fairly important in the grand scheme of things, and certainly will cause our boys a little trouble - her commander too, is going to be a big pain in Todd and Malcolm's arse.

Have been working on act 2, as you can probably tell from some of these comments. It's been slow going, because they keep changing the plot on me again. And also, thanks for beta'ing for me :)

Edited 2011-02-24 14:43 (UTC)

Hey, thought I'd better read again what I said in here before going through my other two reviews one last time and then post them. Can't ask the same questions each time, or make the same observations.

I can tell you here already, as I will do in a further act, that I'm not going to give up the thought of Jethera being an Ancient - on a mission or just cast away - just yet. In the back of my mind the thought will go.

She might be hiding from someone? Hmm, interesting. We'll see more, later, I hope.

Kenny becoming more his own - I think that's a good thing. He needs to be on top of things with a Commander such as Todd next to him. He's of course not stupid, he can see that Todd manoeuvres in dangerous ways.

The stunt with the nursing facility was more of a 'let's send Kenny there, instead of going myself'. Probably had something to do with him being not completely informed, either. But like you said, with Kenny becoming more his own Wraith, or how to say it, maybe these things will be rarer in the future.

Still no idea what that mini-Queen of his is.

I'll be calling the second Elder Hive Red Elder Queen's Hive in the next parts. Until another red Elder Queen shows up, I guess. Perhaps I'll be lucky and there won't be a second one?

I've seen the beginning of which you speak when you say 'pain in the arse'. I bet he's not a happy camper, no.

I'm dreaming about finding the time to reread a bit here and there, and take notes. Also write down that - = Michael thing again, in my note book this time. The old paper is somewhere upstairs, I think. Maybe I should look first. ;-) So much in general to keep track of, and so many words written already. :-D

See you soon.

Spikey

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